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MoonlightSunny Tue Feb 22, 2011 5:50 pmHello to the people from this forum
Me and Mr.Killer are making this 16-20 page novel. Me and him thought it was good now your turn it would really help us to know if its good. This for college btw and This is just 3 Chapters -Moonlight Sunny
The Adventures of Mr.Killer
Chapter 1: The Beginning of the Legend
There was this man who was born on an island. The man was born on 1994. The island wasn't any ordinary island; it was the Isles of the Killer's. They are highly adaptive. They can adapt on any planet on any time. They have advance technology and the time year was 2011. They had teleporters, freeze rays, etc. All the things you can ever dream of. The man’s name was Mr.Killer. His full name was classified. He knew everything like technology and geography. He was the smartest one in the island. His dad was one of the leaders of the isles. The isles were split up in fours. The isles were pretty big. They got around by flying cars, as I said they had advanced technology. They had this barrier. If there was an airplane flying near the barrier, the barrier highly reacts and disables the electricity coming from the plane.
Then one night he had this dream. It was pitch black. It was god. He said "Mr.Killer you’re a prototype of protecting the earth. You have to protect the earth from every danger. Don't trust people around the universe trust the people who you are with". Then he woke up. He didn't feel good at the past week. Then he could teleport out of nowhere, and had super, strength and speed. He could make barriers, spells, and more. Then one day the people from every isle said you should see what’s happening throughout the world. Then he left and that’s when the adventure begins.
When he left no one actually knew that he could teleport from place to place and then he got new powers on the way. He teleported in Tokyo, Japan, he was amazed of the lights and how many people they are. He had never seen this much people and he knew that they didn’t have flying cars just cars with wheels. He walked around all over Tokyo and had an expression of amazement in his face. Now he needed a place to rest. He had a lot of money. It had U.S dollars about 3 trillion dollars in the card but he still didn’t know where the money came from or deposited from.
The lady said hello in Japanese. He can speak any language, He said” Hello” (in Japanese). He said “Can I get one of your best rooms please”. The lady at the front said sure. Swiped the card and escorted him to his room. She said” This is your room the penthouse deluxe. He said “Thanks”. It was a pretty big room; it had stairs to lead to the bed. A fridge and freezer with things in it, microwave, oven, 4 long couches, 12 65 inches TVs in total. They’re glass mostly all over the walls. He took a shower; there were 2 sinks, 2, showers about 4-5 ft. long.
He slept after the shower. He left the room and headed out. He asked the lady at the front desk “Excuse me where is the nearest mall here”. The lady gave him a map and told him where it was. He teleported there. The mall was crowded with a bunch of people. He walked all pass the stores. They were wondering why he wasn’t in school. He was only 15 ½. He walked around all around the mall and the mall had 5 stories. He left the mall. He looked lonely when he walked around.
Chapter 2: Touring around the city with a “Special “Someone”
He accidentally bumped into this girl. They said sorry and she spoke English. She said “You’re new to this place huh”? He chuckled and said yes. “Do you want a tour around the city?
She said. He said sure. He asked her what her name is. She said Sunny. Sunny Nguyen. She winked at him. They went Odaiba. Odaiba is an artificial island in Tokyo Bay. It is full of architectural sculptures. It was like a wonderland of architectural sculptures.
Then they went to Tokyo Tower. It looked like the replica of the Eiffel Tower. They went up the tower and had a whole view of the city. And the bright lights amazed them both. She said “If it was a clear day you can see Mt.Fuji. They had fun going on the tour. She said wait one more place. They went to Asakusa/Sensoji Temple. A huge Buddhist Temple surrounded by old-fashioned shopping stalls, several Shinto Shrines, and great places to eat. The Kaminari-mon gate at the entrance to the temple might be the most photographed location in Tokyo. Best reached by the Subway Ginza line.
Then after she said “where do you live”? He said follow me. She said “This is an expensive hotel. They went up the elevator. They went up, and she said “Your place is pretty big”. She loved the view from his window. “Where are your parents” she said. He said at an island. She had this weird expression on her face. Why are they at an island said Sunny. He said” Let’s just say its classified. She said “Okay”. She also said” I had a lot of fun, do you want to do this again tomorrow”? He said “Okay, Lets meet up here tomorrow? She says “Sure” and winks.
When she left, he took a shower and slept. Then he woke up at 10:38am. He took a shower and waited for her. Mr.Killer and Sunny was thinking about each other all day. When she got to the hotel, she said “Are you ready”? He said “Yes”. They were just walking around the whole city. She almost forgot she had homework and asked “Hey can you help me with my homework” He said “Sure” and smiled. He walked home with her. She said “My homework is pretty hard you won’t get it. She turns back and all the problems were done with work. She says “Never mind”.
Chapter 3: The Confession and the Secret
She says “I love you”. He says “I love you too”. They were holding each other in their arms .After they said they love each other she was blushing, He was too. They told their secrets that they never told. Then he said “I will tell you a secret that you can never tell to anybody”. She says “okay”. “I’m a prototype from god” he says. Then he says do you believe me? She says “prove it” He teleported on top of the Tokyo Tower. She says” So you weren’t kidding”. He says “Please don’t tell anyone”. She says “Okay, Hey it’s getting late can you teleport me home please”. He says “okay” and dropped her home then left.
The next day he teleports to her house and says” Do you want me to teleport you to school”? She says “Sure”. Then teleports to her school. She says” Do you want me to introduce you to my friends”. He says “It’s okay”. Then she hugs him tight and says” I love you”. And he says “I love you too” and teleports back to the hotel.
6 hours later, he picks her up. He asks “Where’d you want to go?” “Anywhere but first let me drop my stuff at my house” she says. “Let’s go to a mall I need to get a camera and a laptop for class” she says. He says “Okay”. He says “Do you want me to pay this for you?” She says “No”. He says “I’ll pay”. She says “fine”. He says “Don’t you need a carrying case or an accessory for your camera or laptop. She says” Oh yea, Thanks”
They set up her camera and laptop. He says “Working fine”? She says “It’s working perfect”. And she says “Why didn’t you get a laptop”. He says “Nah its okay”. 3 hours later he drops her home.
Me and Mr.Killer are making this 16-20 page novel. Me and him thought it was good now your turn it would really help us to know if its good. This for college btw and This is just 3 Chapters -Moonlight Sunny
The Adventures of Mr.Killer
Chapter 1: The Beginning of the Legend
There was this man who was born on an island. The man was born on 1994. The island wasn't any ordinary island; it was the Isles of the Killer's. They are highly adaptive. They can adapt on any planet on any time. They have advance technology and the time year was 2011. They had teleporters, freeze rays, etc. All the things you can ever dream of. The man’s name was Mr.Killer. His full name was classified. He knew everything like technology and geography. He was the smartest one in the island. His dad was one of the leaders of the isles. The isles were split up in fours. The isles were pretty big. They got around by flying cars, as I said they had advanced technology. They had this barrier. If there was an airplane flying near the barrier, the barrier highly reacts and disables the electricity coming from the plane.
Then one night he had this dream. It was pitch black. It was god. He said "Mr.Killer you’re a prototype of protecting the earth. You have to protect the earth from every danger. Don't trust people around the universe trust the people who you are with". Then he woke up. He didn't feel good at the past week. Then he could teleport out of nowhere, and had super, strength and speed. He could make barriers, spells, and more. Then one day the people from every isle said you should see what’s happening throughout the world. Then he left and that’s when the adventure begins.
When he left no one actually knew that he could teleport from place to place and then he got new powers on the way. He teleported in Tokyo, Japan, he was amazed of the lights and how many people they are. He had never seen this much people and he knew that they didn’t have flying cars just cars with wheels. He walked around all over Tokyo and had an expression of amazement in his face. Now he needed a place to rest. He had a lot of money. It had U.S dollars about 3 trillion dollars in the card but he still didn’t know where the money came from or deposited from.
The lady said hello in Japanese. He can speak any language, He said” Hello” (in Japanese). He said “Can I get one of your best rooms please”. The lady at the front said sure. Swiped the card and escorted him to his room. She said” This is your room the penthouse deluxe. He said “Thanks”. It was a pretty big room; it had stairs to lead to the bed. A fridge and freezer with things in it, microwave, oven, 4 long couches, 12 65 inches TVs in total. They’re glass mostly all over the walls. He took a shower; there were 2 sinks, 2, showers about 4-5 ft. long.
He slept after the shower. He left the room and headed out. He asked the lady at the front desk “Excuse me where is the nearest mall here”. The lady gave him a map and told him where it was. He teleported there. The mall was crowded with a bunch of people. He walked all pass the stores. They were wondering why he wasn’t in school. He was only 15 ½. He walked around all around the mall and the mall had 5 stories. He left the mall. He looked lonely when he walked around.
Chapter 2: Touring around the city with a “Special “Someone”
He accidentally bumped into this girl. They said sorry and she spoke English. She said “You’re new to this place huh”? He chuckled and said yes. “Do you want a tour around the city?
She said. He said sure. He asked her what her name is. She said Sunny. Sunny Nguyen. She winked at him. They went Odaiba. Odaiba is an artificial island in Tokyo Bay. It is full of architectural sculptures. It was like a wonderland of architectural sculptures.
Then they went to Tokyo Tower. It looked like the replica of the Eiffel Tower. They went up the tower and had a whole view of the city. And the bright lights amazed them both. She said “If it was a clear day you can see Mt.Fuji. They had fun going on the tour. She said wait one more place. They went to Asakusa/Sensoji Temple. A huge Buddhist Temple surrounded by old-fashioned shopping stalls, several Shinto Shrines, and great places to eat. The Kaminari-mon gate at the entrance to the temple might be the most photographed location in Tokyo. Best reached by the Subway Ginza line.
Then after she said “where do you live”? He said follow me. She said “This is an expensive hotel. They went up the elevator. They went up, and she said “Your place is pretty big”. She loved the view from his window. “Where are your parents” she said. He said at an island. She had this weird expression on her face. Why are they at an island said Sunny. He said” Let’s just say its classified. She said “Okay”. She also said” I had a lot of fun, do you want to do this again tomorrow”? He said “Okay, Lets meet up here tomorrow? She says “Sure” and winks.
When she left, he took a shower and slept. Then he woke up at 10:38am. He took a shower and waited for her. Mr.Killer and Sunny was thinking about each other all day. When she got to the hotel, she said “Are you ready”? He said “Yes”. They were just walking around the whole city. She almost forgot she had homework and asked “Hey can you help me with my homework” He said “Sure” and smiled. He walked home with her. She said “My homework is pretty hard you won’t get it. She turns back and all the problems were done with work. She says “Never mind”.
Chapter 3: The Confession and the Secret
She says “I love you”. He says “I love you too”. They were holding each other in their arms .After they said they love each other she was blushing, He was too. They told their secrets that they never told. Then he said “I will tell you a secret that you can never tell to anybody”. She says “okay”. “I’m a prototype from god” he says. Then he says do you believe me? She says “prove it” He teleported on top of the Tokyo Tower. She says” So you weren’t kidding”. He says “Please don’t tell anyone”. She says “Okay, Hey it’s getting late can you teleport me home please”. He says “okay” and dropped her home then left.
The next day he teleports to her house and says” Do you want me to teleport you to school”? She says “Sure”. Then teleports to her school. She says” Do you want me to introduce you to my friends”. He says “It’s okay”. Then she hugs him tight and says” I love you”. And he says “I love you too” and teleports back to the hotel.
6 hours later, he picks her up. He asks “Where’d you want to go?” “Anywhere but first let me drop my stuff at my house” she says. “Let’s go to a mall I need to get a camera and a laptop for class” she says. He says “Okay”. He says “Do you want me to pay this for you?” She says “No”. He says “I’ll pay”. She says “fine”. He says “Don’t you need a carrying case or an accessory for your camera or laptop. She says” Oh yea, Thanks”
They set up her camera and laptop. He says “Working fine”? She says “It’s working perfect”. And she says “Why didn’t you get a laptop”. He says “Nah its okay”. 3 hours later he drops her home.
